Member Poetry, Submissions and criticism

[Blazingorchidlv]

♥Could you♥
Could you hear my words or see my cold breath
Could you take me in your arms, till I am warm
My body is shivering with coldness and fright
Shivering with the coldness of the night
Could you once again tell me your secrets
Tell me how much you care and whisper in my ear
Could you say the things I hold so dear
Tell me that you are here for me
I wish I could see your bright smiling face
I wish I could make you see
Could you have told them you couldn't go
Could you have told them you had one more thing to do
You were too young to go, too young to be taken away from me
If you had told them I may not be crying so many sad tears
Could you have told them how much I needed you
Could you have told them how much I loved you
What will I do without you what will my life be like
Before you go could you please give me one last kiss goodbye
Let me hear your heart beat one last time

Kimberly A Heinen

Copyright ©2003 Kimberly A Heinen

this is my one published poem.

[senrik]

♥Could you♥
this is my one published poem.

Very nice. I felt like I could feel it inside of me. Its a nice warm feeling too.

[senrik]

None of the ones I have here are published, they are mostly works in progress


The secret admirer

I've seen you from a distance
Quietly gazing out at you
I've sought you for quite some time
Watching as you pass
Admiring you from afar
Sharing your joys, and fears
But never saying a word.
Sometimes there are no words
To show you how I feel
And now I have but one
... Yes.

~senrik 8/9/2003

[senrik]

Together

They say what were doing is wrong
That we should not be one
Because we come different paths
From the corners of the globe

I don't care about that, we're free
to define how we want to live
Live in mine, or in yours,
Or a culture we decide for ourselves
Were both young and single
And open in our minds
So who cares what they say
Let them close their eyes.

As i lay me down to sleep
You warm and gentle in my arms
We can forget the world
And be, at last together

[senrik]

I hold you close to my heart

Just so I can push you away

I tell you my thoughts

Just to watch you squirm

I look into your eyes

Just to try to understand you

I look deep into your soul

Just to look away with fear

I will never understand you

Just because I don't try

I will never again feel the gentleness of your touch

Just because I was too stupid to see

I will never taste your sweet lips again

Just because I was to naive to listen

I will never again be close to you

Just because I never really cared

This is my most recent poem I wrote a couple weeks ago.

Very interesting, Reminds me of a poem i grew in my early 20's. I understand it, about how funny things people do to one another. actually reminds me of an ex of mine...

[John]

Tomorrow, I will merge this thread into the "My Art" thread, which is where people have been posting their creative stuff for the last couple of months. No need for a separate thread...